Ch.1
Dear Diary,
I have just landed on this strange
island along with a few other boys. The only sign of human life on this island
so far is just a group of boys, the oldest being 12. I am not sure how to feel
about an adult not being present on the island with us. The first boy I ran
into here on the island is a fair-haired boy named Ralph. He seems pretty nice,
besides the fact that he keeps trying to get away from me and avoid me.
Something about Ralph made me feel
like I could trust him, so I told him one of my embarrassing secrets. I told
him how all of the boys used to call me "Piggy". Ralph laughed at me
at first, but he soon dropped the topic. We found a conch shell in the sand,
and decided to blow into it, to see if anyone else was on the island
with us. It took a few tries before the shell actually made a loud noise, but
when it did a fleet of boys with black garments came from the distance.
A few minutes after meeting the group
of boys, Ralph told them my secret about being called "Piggy". I felt
so betrayed by this because I trusted Ralph and he told everyone my
embarrassing secret. All of the boys laughed at me, and called me fat, I was
very upset. However, I still thought of Ralph as my friend even though he betrayed me. We decided that we should elect a leader of the group, the
nominees were Ralph, and Jack. Majority rules led to Ralph being our leader.
Because of the results, Jack was upset, but then Ralph allowed Jack to be
leader of the choir, and everything was fine. The rest of the day was
pretty calm.
Signed,
Piggy
Very excellent! You portrayed the role of Piggy very nicely. Great grammar and spelling. Also reminded me of the time they found the conch shell. Continue the good work.
ReplyDeletegood descriptions. great way of describing piggy. awesome use of words in this and good grammar.
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ReplyDeleteha I really thought you were piggy. I am in awe of your well written essay. Good job containing chapter 1 in just a few paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job with the voice as Piggy. The events that you included were also important and well described. Your grammar was good and everything else went along great, good job.
ReplyDeleteI love your entries perspective of piggy it was very good. nice job on including important events also!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I Love your entry. You reminded me of what happened in the story and started to put everything in motion.
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